最後に一つ具体例を載せたい。
これは過去に自分で解いてエッセイ無料チェックを受けた問題と回答だ。(ちなみに回答の内容は思いつきのフィクションが半分)
たまたまほぼ同じ問題がTOEFLで出たので、ほぼ同様の内容を書いた。
その結果、スコアが28点だった。20点台後半を目指す際参考程度に読んでもらえれば幸いだ。
たまたまほぼ同じ問題がTOEFLで出たので、ほぼ同様の内容を書いた。
その結果、スコアが28点だった。20点台後半を目指す際参考程度に読んでもらえれば幸いだ。
Question:Do you agree or
disagree with the following statement?
Parents
are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your
answer.
As humans, we devote a great deal of our lives to learning things-from parents, friends, and teachers. Whereas many people believe that
parents are the best teachers, I personally believe that parents as best
teachers is only true for part of life. Actually a large part of what happens
in one’s life is taught more effectively by others - school teachers, friends,
or supervisors- people who are experienced in specialized areas of life: universities’
admissions and career development.
To begin with, people cannot be good advisers about something unless
they know or experience the situation. One good illustration of this is that if
parents never went to college or university, they are not able to advise what
it is like to enter university. For
example, I graduated from a university in Tokyo, but my parents both only
graduated from high schools and have never moved out of a town where they were
born. When I said to them, “I would like to go to university in Tokyo”, my
parents said, “What’s the point? You can work in this town after high school. We
have made our livings here without bachelor degrees.” As can be seen in the conversation,
it was very tough to make them understand the value of going to university and to
persuade them to allow me to do so. Also, when making research on universities,
I had to consult with teachers and friends about which university I should attend
because none of my parents knew anything about them. In deed, my best teachers
for the specialized are of university admission were friends and teachers at
high school, not my parents.
Moreover, it is also difficult for parents to give advice about work
which has been changing rapidly in the world now. For instance, I have been
working in the financial industry, where a lot of technical knowledge is
required and many changes in markets happen in a short period of time. When I decided
to work in the industry, I talked to my parents although I did not intend to
change my decision due to their feedback. They told me that the industry is not
good because the industry is just making loans to companies based on
collaterals of real estate without thinking anything. They also said that
manufacturing industries such as Toyota or Mitsubishi Motors are much better
and meaningful to work at. I was very sad to know that their thought were
obsolete and they lacked knowledge about the recent trend of the economy and
popularity of the financial industry, which is more creative and requires more
advanced skills than they thought. In view of this, it is dangerous to believe
advice from parents who have lived different generation.
Nonetheless, many people contend that parents are the best teachers
because they spend more time with children in a variety of circumstances—at
home, in community activities, among neighbors, and with relatives. However,
the benefits of learning from people with specialized knowledge far outweigh
the more limited value of learning from one’s parents.
In conclusion, I believe parents are not
the best teachers. As one’s life is more complex and has too many problems to
be solved by parents, people should seek the best teacher depending on a
subject―teachers and university students in
contemplating university admissions and employment resources in dealing with
career development. (562 words)
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